Wednesday, September 16, 2015

Kendall Jordan Bully S/R Second Re-Do

Summary Response Outline

Summary: Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, main idea
Bully directed by Lee Hirsch exposes the monstrosity bullying has become in the world today.
  • Supporting ideas to prove main ideas
The movie consists of stories of bullying victims, how they have hurt themselves, and even sought suicide over life. Teachers are depicted as completely overlooking the children’s problems.      

  • Explanation of ideas
For example, teen Tyler Long was pushed to the limit. When he tried to get help from the teachers in his school, they pushed his issues to the side. The family knew what was going on, and there was no doubt in their minds bullying was why Tyler took his own life.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
Bullying and self harm in today’s world is a problem for all children and teens. Bully attacks important points about how everyone should be treated as an equal and how the power of words can change a life.

Response: Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, agree/disagree (correctly portrays/ incorrectly portrays), because ___________ and ______________
Bully, directed by Lee Hirsch, accurately demonstrates the horrors of bullying because Hirsch wants viewers know that anyone can make a difference.   
  • Claim 1: perfectly demonstrates what bullying can do to a person
    • Set-up There are many victims within schools such as sixteen year old Kelby. Kelby confessed to being gay and suffered under bullying. She was picked on by her classmates and her teachers.
    • Evidence: Kelby recalls “My friends were the only ones keeping me from hurting myself” (Hirsch).
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim - Kelby cut herself and tried to commit suicide three times, but her close friends helped her handle the harassment.  
  • Counterclaim 1: However, it could seem to a viewer that Hirsch only portrays extreme cases in the movie.
    • Evidence: As one of the school administrators said, “Kids will be kids, boys will be boys, they are just cruel at this age” (Hirsch).
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim
It is true that not all bullying cases end in suicide, retaliation, or some other extreme reaction. The movie only showed people who cut, committed suicide, or were severely bullied.  
  • What are the strengths/flaws of this argument? Rebuttal progression
One cannot deny that not every bullying case ends in tragedy. However, suicide is the second leading cause of death in teens and tenth cause of death overall (10 Leading Causes of Death 2010). More and more students have been taking their lives, and Hirsch is pointing out that bullying is a serious problem.

  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
Hirsch’s movie Bully justifies meaningful points about bullying in today’s world and the effects it has on teens and children. Anyone can make a difference in a victim’s life, and a person can go from a bystander to a hero just by speaking up. Hirsch’s points in the movie demonstrate the immense impact bullying has on youth.

Citations:

"Top Ten Causes of Death, United States 2010."  United States Centers for Disease Control and Prevention.  United States Government, 2010. Web. 1 Sept. 2015. <http://www.cdc.gov/injury/wisqars/pdf/10LCID_All_Deaths_By_Age_Group_2010-a.pdf>.

13, 2014 October. "Kelby Speaks Out on Bullying." PBS. PBS, 13 Oct. 2014. Web. 28 Aug. 2015. <http://www.pbs.org/independentlens/blog/kelby-speaks-bullying>.
Bully. Dir. Lee Hirsch. Perf. Ja'Meya Jackson, Kelby Johnson, Alex Libby, Tyler Long, Ty Smalley. 2011. DVD.

1 comment:

  1. No opinion words in your summary. Concluding sentence should contain title and author and be one sentence.

    Make sure to expand explanation claim and counterclaim quotations: explain quote and connect to the claim/counterclaim point

    Expand rebuttal progression: spend more time proving your claim- validate what you proved earlier.

    17/20

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