Saturday, September 12, 2015

Kendall Jordan and John Henke Re-Do Bully Summary Response

Summary Response Outline

Summary: Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, main idea
Bully directed by Lee Hirsch exposes the monstrosity bullying has become in the world today.
  • Supporting ideas to prove main ideas
The entire movie consists of stories of bullying victims, how they have hurt themselves, and even sought suicide over life. Teachers are depicted as completely overlooking this bullying, scolding even the victim rather than the actual bully themselves.      

  • Explanation of ideas
For example, teen Tyler Long was pushed to the limit through constant persecution. When he tried to get help from the teachers in his school, they pushed his issues to the side. The family knew what was going on, and there was no doubt in their minds why Tyler took his own life.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
Bullying and self harm in today’s world is a problem for children and teens. Bully attacks important points about how everyone should be treated as an equal and how the power of words can completely change a life.

Response: Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, agree/disagree (correctly portrays/ incorrectly portrays), because ___________ and ______________
Bully, directed by Lee Hirsch, accurately demonstrates the horrors of bullying because Hirsch wants everyone to know they can make a difference.   
  • Claim 1: perfectly demonstrates what bullying can do to a person
    • Set-up There are many victims within schools such as sixteen year old Kelby. Kelby confessed to being gay and suffered under bullying. She was picked on by her classmates and her teachers; the taunting seemed to never end.
    • Evidence: Kelby recalls “My friends were the only ones keeping me from hurting myself” (Hirsch).
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim - Kelby cut herself and tried to commit suicide three times, but her close friends helped her handle the harassment and they saved her from further harming herself.  
  • Counterclaim 1: However, it could seem to a viewer that Hirsch only portrays extreme cases in the movie.
    • Evidence: As one of the school administrators said, “Kids will be kids, boys will be boys, they are just cruel at this age” (Hirsch).
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim
It is true that not all bullying cases end in suicide, retaliation, or some other extreme reaction. Many people who are bullied in K-12 don’t have a problem and do not take excessive measures. The movie only showed people who cut, committed suicide, or were severely bullied.  
  • What are the strengths/flaws of this argument? Rebuttal progression
At first glance, one could think that bullying is not a significant problem. One cannot deny that not every bullying case ends in tragedy. However, suicide is the second leading cause of death in teens and tenth cause of death overall (10 Leading Causes of Death 2010). More and more students have been taking their lives because the bullying doesn’t stop. Hirsch is pointing out that bullying is a serious problem and he thinks it should not be overlooked.

  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
Hirsch’s movie Bully justifies meaningful points about bullying in today’s world and the effects it has on teens and children. Anyone can make a difference in a victim’s life and a person can go from a bystander to a hero just by speaking up. Hirsch’s points in the movie demonstrate the immense impact bullying has on youth.

Citations:

"Top Ten Causes of Death, United States 2010."  United States Centers for Disease Control and Prevention.  United States Government, 2010. Web. 1 Sept. 2015. <http://www.cdc.gov/injury/wisqars/pdf/10LCID_All_Deaths_By_Age_Group_2010-a.pdf>.

13, 2014 October. "Kelby Speaks Out on Bullying." PBS. PBS, 13 Oct. 2014. Web. 28 Aug. 2015. <http://www.pbs.org/independentlens/blog/kelby-speaks-bullying>.
Bully. Dir. Lee Hirsch. Perf. Ja'Meya Jackson, Kelby Johnson, Alex Libby, Tyler Long, Ty Smalley. 2011. DVD.

1 comment:

  1. Good summary: make sure to remove opinion words; a little less detail and more time spent on conclusion.( tie back to title and author). It should also be one sentence.

    Good response. Also, make sure to use strong verbs. Push forward thinking in your rebuttal. Use the rebuttal progression model to help you in this process.

    Concluding sentence: It should also be one sentence.
    You have good components- we just need to polish this up.

    17/20

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